This update adds a prologue. I think it adds some suspense and better justifies the new title. Feel free to let me know what you think.
I added two pages to chapter nineteen and removed some of the Ukrainian and Russian words. Otherwise, I provided better translations.
This update is small. Mostly some technical corrections. I’ve you’ve read v1, this doesn’t add anything. It’s still only parts one, two, and three.
While writing TFD, I wrote four other related stories. They served as backstory for me. I’ve sent a few out to interested readers and gotten good comments. I’ve also published the Tommy short story to my Stories Online page.
For the first time ever, three of the stories are available here. The forth Story, Jonathan and Rachel isn’t complete enough and a good bit of it made its way into TFD. I may finish it up someday, but probably not.
Kevin and Kristen tells how they met and how their relationship fared.
Kristen and Andrew fills in the story for how they became a couple.
Tommy tells a little of his Marine Corps story. I want to finish this one.
I’ve attempted a more professional look for this latest story and changed the title. This new title, “The Loyalty Gene” may not stick, it depends on what my beta readers think.
This version includes parts one, two, and three. Parts four and five are still in work.
Feel free to message me and render your opinion.
I changed the title and added part three. Parts one and two have been revised to better fit with part three. Part three has some good stuff in it. Check out part three, chapter six.
Writing flashbacks are fun.
The Ukrainian and Russian are all from Google Translate. I’d like to find a native speaker to help me revise the affected scenes.
I hope you enjoy these updates.
Consider this an early beta of part two. My editor has not seen this yet and it probably contains multiple errors. I hope all of you enjoy this.